- Mae
- A few minor grammatical errors
- Adding a little bit more background to open the thesis
- Strong body paragraphs with plenty of examples and viewpoints
- The opening sentence here was a little vague here, maybe cleaning up some wording might create a more rounded statement
- Complete citations of all authors, super quick and easy
- Myli
- Strong opening with really clear message
- A few grammatical errors, super easy fix
- Make sure to fix the text options, it was miscolored, maybe on your end as a note-to-self mark?
- Great topics and discussions. I think your conclusion will be super easy to bring everything together once complete
